Can you write a haiku?
Good morning, students & families!
- Please refer to the haiku document sent home yesterday and post a haiku some time today or over the weekend if you prefer. To do this, click on this post, scroll down to the comments and post your haiku.
- Perhaps I will see you in the Friday Fiesta at 1:00 in Team Meetings.
- I have returned comments on many assignments now and thank you for turning your work in. Let me know if you need assistance.
- Please review the calendar here and in Teams for new updates.
- Have nice weekend and try finding shapes in nature or in the community if you are out walking. We are going to talk about shapes next week.
38 Comments
Katherine
Ocean aqua waves
Seashells shine on the beach sands
Crystal water breeze
taylorgibbsl
When I read this I imagine the sound of the waves, the feeling of a breeze on my face and I have so many memories of walking along beaches. Nicely done!
Katherine
Thank you
Amira Bissett
I like the way you describe the beach. 🙂
matthew
cheetos are awesome
delicious, orange, crunchy
give me some right now
taylorgibbsl
Matthew this makes my mouth water. I notice that you may be articulating some words like delicious as 4 syllables perhaps. However, if you look them up in the dictionary (online is easiest) it will provide syllables for the word. Delicious is 3 syllables.
Line 2 in your haiku needs to be 7 syllables, please edit this. Otherwise lines one and three are perfect. Nice work and keep going.
Amira Bissett
Haha, thanks Matthew! We love it and want cheezies now.
Priya
Flowers are blooming
Butterfly likes the flowers
She is happy now
Amira Bissett
I like your poem Pri Pri. 🙂
taylorgibbsl
Nicely done, Priya. I can imagine a butterfly in my garden as I read this haiku. Thank you for writing today.
Priya
Thank you
Amira Bissett
Look at that flower
Dancing in the wind so smooth
It is so pretty
taylorgibbsl
Amira, this haiku makes me think of flowers dancing in my garden, I really enjoyed it. Thank you and I wonder what colour this smooth flower is that you are writing about.
jazmyn
the pretty flowers bloom
I love the colors in spring
they look magical
taylorgibbsl
Thank you, Jazmyn. I like the image of flowers of many colours blooming in this wonderful season. Line 1 in your haiku is not quite 5 syllables. I appreciate your effort and encourage you to recount Line 1.
ELI
I WANT CHEEETO PUFFS NOW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
ELI
Hiding under bed
Pouncing playfully on toys
Cally my kitten
taylorgibbsl
Eli, I can imagine Cally going through all the motions that you describe. Well done and thank you for the lovely haiku about your kitten.
Kiev
Buzzing bee so cute
Spreading joy and flying so far
So small but so brave
taylorgibbsl
Kiev, the description of bees as brave and spreading joy makes my heart sing. I really like your poem. I count too many syllables in Line 2 of your poem , so please recount it and possibly make an edit. Thank you so much adding it here, you are as brave as a bee.
Kevin Maeng
Warm hug on the fire
then the fire died the dark fear
the family survived dark
taylorgibbsl
Kevin, your haiku tells a story of survival in my mind. I like the image of a fire providing a hug. Line 3 has too many syllables. Hopefully you can recount your syllables and make an edit. Thank you so much for your effort.
Jeonghan Jeon
Sunshine is dazzling
There is a great big big tree
The bird’s on the tree
taylorgibbsl
Nice work, Jeonghan. I can imagine the scene you are describing, and you are demonstrating the ability to count and hear syllables. Thank you.
Jiwon Yang
Lovely spring is coming
Flowers bloom and birds sing songs
My birthday is coming
taylorgibbsl
Jiwon, you are developing a sense of haiku. It is tricky to count syllables and your LIne 2 shows the skill of writing 7 syllables. How exciting to have a birthday in spring! Happy Birthday.
BenjaminT
Ben is sleeping now
He wakes with sun shining bright
He hugs his mamma
Ben goes down the stairs
He says hi to his daddy
Then he plays some games
taylorgibbsl
Ben, you are demonstrating excellent skills with syllables and I like how these 2 tell a story. You have a nice routine and you are kind to your parents. Very nice.
oscar
Daddy eats doughnuts
he thinks they are so tasty
delicious and sweet
taylorgibbsl
Oscar, this haiku is perfect and it makes my mouth water. I can imagine chocolate glazed doughnuts in my mind and I want to sink my teeth into one right now. Yum!
kenzi
my hiaku is:
pretty feathers fall
from a cardinal so red
soaring through the sky
taylorgibbsl
Kenzi, you are clear in you syllables and in your description. I can imagine the bird and I like the word soaring it adds with the movement. Lovely.
Tristan
kittens are so soft
and cute funny fluffy
they purr so softy
taylorgibbsl
Tristan, this haiku has so much texture it really touches my senses. Thank you and your syllables are developing nicely. Thank you.
Neema
Cats in the rain meow
Furry cats play in the rain
Cats like sleepy naps
Dogs play in the rain
Dogs eat and bark, play and sleep
Dogs sleep outside, woof
taylorgibbsl
Neema, you are demonstrating the ability to count syllables and you certainly have a way with words: I can imagine these animals having fun and resting I love the phrase, “cats take sleepy naps” Very well done!
Oliver
At first I thought it
was a big fluffy squirrel
But it was a duck
taylorgibbsl
Oliver that must have been a surprise. Thank yo so much for completing your haiku and you demonstrate the ability to count syllables and write a haiku. WEll done!!