I think headphones should be allowed in class. Why? Because I think giving kids the opportunity to listen to music in lass is really important . I’m always humming my favorite song and I always think: I wonder if we are allowed headphones in class to listen to our music without disturbing others.
I live around music, I dance I sing and in the car, I groove to my tunes. Now think about it; if you are always in the car, or at dance, and you’re listening to music, don’t you think six hours with NO music is OK? In my books no it’s not OK. Because if you are around music that much, it’s really hard to live without.
Your opinion is very convincing when you ask “don’t you think six hours with NO music is ok?”. You are really considering your audience when you are asking questions in your writing. I think your writing needs to be organized more clearly with connective sentences such as firstly, second etc.
Something to also think about is the rule around music. How would you hear the teacher if he is saying something? Including ideas about this would make your paragraph stronger.